Audience essay feedback and learner response

1) Copy and paste your feedback from the email in full - WWW, EBI and LR.

WWW:

·         An ability to write a sustained essay that argues a viewpoint e.g. a clear introduction and conclusion which responds to the statement

·         Some examples provided on how the internet has effected the music industry. For example, the types of applications where consumers can use the internet to access their music e.g. Apple Music, Tidal and Spotify

EBI:

·         Lacking specific subject terminology to your writing look back at planning sheet and GLoW to see what terminology you can include

2) What was the word count for your essay?

471 words3) What was your strongest paragraph? Why do you think it was better than others?

My strongest paragraph was the music industry paragraph because I used examples of apps such as Spotify and Apple Music to support my point. I also explained how the creation of the internet has changed the way that consumers listen to music.

4) What was your weakest paragraph? Why do you think it wasn't as good as others?

I think my weakest paragraph is film and TV industry because I didn't expalin in detail how the film industry as changed. I also didn't use specific subject terminology.

5) How can you improve your extended writing in GCSE Media Studies in future?

I can improve my extended writing by answering the question in more detail and using a lot more subject specific terminology.   
 6) Write ONE thing you have learned about the internet, audience and industry from completing this essay.

I learned that the creation of the internet has changed many industries and how consumers and audiences used the industry products. The internet has changed the world and our daily lives.